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Memories are fragile glass flowers.
The ones I kept in the vase with
Old water just to make them feel


Alive

You, the very definite reason those flowers
Still remain my coffin for regret and sadness.

Glass petals cold to the touch. Hit the ground,
They'll break into slivers and tiny prisms that
Cause blood to flow.

Like you, When you told me I was a shame to be loathed
That my depression was unbecoming. You couldn't handle
Me. Yet, Love smeared me on your lips every so often.

Regret wrenched eagerly at my heart, pulsing to it's last deep
Breath, I stare those poor glass flowers down to remember how
Little I tried to keep you.

The one last thing in my life that soothed the most unrefined part of me.


Suicide
Angst? yes.
I feel this one of my better pieces though.
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transitionsabroad7 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011
this is amazing
well done!
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underworldriver Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. :)
and thank you for reading.
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TornStitches Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2011
well-written, althought ultimately sad. nice work.
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underworldriver Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :)
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MaestosoMaestro Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow that's really really well done!!! I love it :D
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underworldriver Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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MaestosoMaestro Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
No problem :)
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MaestosoMaestro Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow that's really really well done!!! I love it :D
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Zrev Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011  Student Writer
Beautiful. :heart:
I love the contrast between the words 'alive' and 'suicide'.
However, the idea of suicide being used as a resort kinda puts me off. But that's just me.

Also, it seems like starting the line with "Me." was a little strange. I see how you want it to be seperated and make it's own point, but I think it could be done in a different way.

Anyways, still great.
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underworldriver Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thanks for sharing your opinions, I like to hear what you have to say.
You need to understand I'm kind of refitting myself in the whole subject of writing. I left that part of me for a while during my whole drama of the year crap. I abandoned it and I'm relearning I guess you can say. *sigh* sorry for ranting.

So you'll have to excuse me for the crap i may produce for a bit. :(
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