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The Weight On My shoulders by =underworldriver:iconunderworldriver:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Spoken Word


Weight on my shoulders
Hard for me to breath
I know what I did to you will be my gulit
How could I ever render such filth
Being under the infulence
led me to the horrible occurance
Occurance of your pain
Wishing that you could've seen me sane
Now this gulit perspires from the weight
Knowing now that I will never see you
And never have a chance to tell you to for me wait
I would like to express myself to apologise
Make easier my demise
Today is the last day that I write to you
Filling the paper with what I wished I could do, for you
Don't respond, I will be gone by the time I recieve
I hurt that I won't even feel the relief
Sorry, for being that night, sour
I wish I could hold your hand in my dieing hour
I close my eyes, to the weight on my shoulders
©2008 =underworldriver
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yayz! Its for rawemotion* and their theme weight on my shoulders! I don't really know how i feel about this one. Though i gave it my best shot! This is about a guy who is suffering because he was out partying one night with this close friend of his, which happens to a girl that he was pursuing. He drank a bit too much and his friends and him though it would be a great idea to drug her up and well, rape her...and now he decided to commit sucide because of the guilt he felt was just unbearable. there is no mature content here. This is the story behind. perhaps what played out in my mind.. i wanted to be something real. and i feel that this happens alot when people are young and under the influence. i hope you enjoy it.
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*Nanaki-E:iconNanaki-E: May 3, 2008, 12:39:35 PM
Nicely done! :XD:

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"You know... you could use a little... adjustment. Just step into my office, and brace yourself, bitch!"
~Nanaki
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=underworldriver:iconunderworldriver: May 3, 2008, 12:59:50 PM
you think it matches its back story well? i mean its kind of hard to tell because i didn't want to make it extremely obvious.

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~Save me from my fears, save my butterflies and love me forever, my beloved Styx~
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Remember we all have Rawem0tion* :blackrose:
*Nanaki-E:iconNanaki-E: May 3, 2008, 1:00:14 PM
Yeah, I think so. ^.^

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"You know... you could use a little... adjustment. Just step into my office, and brace yourself, bitch!"
~Nanaki
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=underworldriver:iconunderworldriver: May 3, 2008, 1:06:50 PM
Great that put me a little at ease, cause i wasn't sure...

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~Save me from my fears, save my butterflies and love me forever, my beloved Styx~
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Remember we all have Rawem0tion* :blackrose:
*Nanaki-E:iconNanaki-E: May 3, 2008, 1:08:56 PM
Yeah, I'm usually the same with all the stuff that I draw/write.

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"You know... you could use a little... adjustment. Just step into my office, and brace yourself, bitch!"
~Nanaki
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=underworldriver:iconunderworldriver: May 3, 2008, 1:48:22 PM
yeah i usually don't though not with most of my stuff. like i said i'm not used to writing when it comes from the top of my head. I usually speak through my heart when i write.

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~Save me from my fears, save my butterflies and love me forever, my beloved Styx~
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Remember we all have Rawem0tion* :blackrose:
*Nanaki-E:iconNanaki-E: May 3, 2008, 2:10:07 PM
Yeah, I have to have stuff figured out, then I add the details.

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"You know... you could use a little... adjustment. Just step into my office, and brace yourself, bitch!"
~Nanaki
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=underworldriver:iconunderworldriver: May 3, 2008, 2:43:30 PM
yeah usually thats the case. I'm just fortunate that i can write on a whim and it always comes out like a godsend. I think my ability to write the way i do is a godend...

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~Save me from my fears, save my butterflies and love me forever, my beloved Styx~
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Remember we all have Rawem0tion* :blackrose:
*theemopeacemaker:icontheemopeacemaker: May 4, 2008, 2:18:00 PM
wow your stuffs is really cool. like seriously haha

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peanut butter: my one and only love. forever.
you'd better believe it.

you should check out my pics. go on, you know you want to
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