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I don't even know where to start.

Is it the fact that the heavens shook with the first word you spoke?
Or perhaps it was when you put your hand on my thigh and
I felt myself drown in a thousand unspoken sensations.

Maybe, you can help me figure this out?

Do you even think that we have this fabulous unfathomed
Connection that even the gods would dare not speak of?
Or perhaps it was that moment when you held me tight and
I started to loose myself in your scent.

Gosh, I am really clueless here. How could I be so lost.
Give me a sign?

Man, when I see your smile, all of my worries and cares disappear behind those
Distant clouds in the sky.  I feel like elation is an understatement. I really do.

When you act your goofy-self I can't help but sigh. Feeling myself warm just a bit inside. I giggle
Happily at your happiness. I never realized how cute you were until then.

Or when you look at me using all of your intent in your intense passionate eyes. I didn't know
Just how weak my knees were until that moment.

You can probably figure it by now. I didn't even need to go that far.
You are something sweet, indulgent, decedent;healthy and fulfilling.
You are a craving that brings me happiness.

So I'll ask you now, do I even need to begin?
Heh, This was fun to write. I liked not feeling so strict with my vocabulary and making it believable as if it were real conversation. I intended this piece to be like that, so please don't critique me on that little bit.

Comments and feedback is welcomed. :heart:
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belfasterd Featured By Owner May 30, 2011
Wow this is really well written! <3
It also really reminds me of my thoughts as of late
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underworldriver Featured By Owner May 31, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much :hear:
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belfasterd Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2011
you are welcome!
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a-fiery-boom Featured By Owner May 25, 2011  Student General Artist
Wonderful piece! I think it sums up the perfect relationships quite well! The voice is also very nice and smooth in here too!
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underworldriver Featured By Owner May 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :)
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Gary-thedreamingpoet Featured By Owner May 21, 2011  Professional Writer
And it was fun to read! I like it.
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underworldriver Featured By Owner May 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :)
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Spuffy12 Featured By Owner May 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Very beautiful my dear (:
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underworldriver Featured By Owner May 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, love. :)
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Spuffy12 Featured By Owner May 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome, hun (:
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UltimaMage578 Featured By Owner May 20, 2011
Love this stanza: Is it the fact that heavens shook with the first word you spoke?
Or perhaps it was when you put your hand on my thigh and
I felt myself drown in a thousand unspoken sensations.
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underworldriver Featured By Owner May 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you. it's rare for the first verse to be a favorite. :) gah, there was supposed to be a 'the' before heavens. *goes to fix it* :B
seriously dude, thanks for the support. I promise that i will get to reading your's again sometime..just blah. need a good day to sit down and just tackle my inbox of 10k some odd messages :XD:
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UltimaMage578 Featured By Owner May 21, 2011
Don't worry. I have 10k messages myself.

I really do like the first verse. Love has always been a favorite subject of mine though.
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underworldriver Featured By Owner May 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
i know once they get to such a number its hard to even to quash it a bit.
haha, i just watch and admire too many artists. >.<
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UltimaMage578 Featured By Owner May 21, 2011
Yes, thank god though, most of those numbers are clubs.
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SunriseRainbow Featured By Owner May 20, 2011
That was really well said hun (: Nice work ^^
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underworldriver Featured By Owner May 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :)
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SunriseRainbow Featured By Owner May 20, 2011
You're welcome (:
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